Memento Mori

It's cute. Not much to review here. You might want to lessen the use of but. I don't know how, though. I think your using it every other line is ...

seam - Should be seem Anyway, aside from that, great story!! I love twisted fairy tales. There's something about this piece that seems very intriguing. I'm very drawn to the ...

I got it, but I don't find it funny. Don't take offense please. I'm not even sure if I got it right. >.> Yours truly, Memento Mori

Nice story, and it has an original plot too. I couldn't find any errors, so forgive me if I just overlooked them. It's executed perfectly, and I think you did ...

It's a good informative article. It's nice to know that somebody actually cares to write about abusive teen relationships that aren't necessarily physical. Yours truly, Memento Mori

It's very realistic, and the characters are easy to identify with, I'll give you that. But I agree with KJ. It doesn't really have anything of interest as you didn't ...

It's good. I think it'd be better if you had posted it in two paragraphs though. It's much easier to read that way. Yours truly, Memento Mori

It's a very mysterious and interesting start. I'd love to read the first chapter, and I'll be on the lookout for it. Yours truly, Memento Mori

It's pretty good. Just make sure your vampire won't end up cliched. I'll keep reading. Yours truly, Memento Mori

I'm somewhat confused. I read it twice, and I still am. I can't tell who's who. Maybe I just didn't read it properly. o.0 Yours truly, Memento Mori

It was easy to read, but I'd love to see more characterization there. It's a good start to any story. I'd just change the title, if I were you. Just ...

It's a nice train of thought, but it's not a story really. It's very realistic though. Good one.

Thanks for the tips. I'll keep them in mind when I write my next story. :D

Thanks for the tips. I'll go fix my mistakes now.

Although a bit confusing at times, I think it's pretty good. I'll read the next chapter if I find it.